
But good writing isn't made up of simple sentences alone. An author plays with sentence length to really convey meaning. I want my students to be able to do the same. I want their writing to sing the way that any other author's does. However, that is no simple task! The kids are content just writing about Jim going to the park with no further detail.
So I decided to set out and see if I could teach my students how to expand sentences in a clear, coherent way.
We have been talking a lot about how to make narratives better. I am always asking them who did what when where why and how? So I thought I would use that same idea to get the kids to expand their simple sentences. I gave them a very simple sentence.
The man went shopping.
I then asked them to draw it. After about 2 minutes of drawing, the students shared their sketches. Every single one of them had a different drawing. Some added a picture of Target. Some drew the man with a car. Others had him on a skateboard. There were some with a grocery cart. The sentences were so different because the sentence wasn't detailed enough.

We then began to revise the sentence so that we could expand it. I had the students write the expansions right on top of the original sentence. Once it was fully expanded, the students then set out and redrew the sentence. This time around, the kids were all able to get a much more similar picture to each other! This really helped to drive home the point that the more details there are in a sentence, the easier it is for the reader to visualize the intended meaning.

Finally, on the third day, I had the students each expand a different simple sentence on their own. They used the same expansion strategy of asking themselves Who? What? When? Where? Why? and How? and then drew a picture of their expanded sentence. Once these were all done and displayed, I made it more of an interactive activity. The students put a sticky note over their drawing. The other students then came up and tried to draw the pictures themselves. They tried to see how close the pictures would match based on the expanded sentence!
Overall, this set of three lessons really have set the kids up on a great path towards more detailed sentences. They are more conscious of what they are writing and how. Our next step is to venture into revising using those third expanded sentences. Making them clearer, more precise, and less long winded (because, let's face it, the kids liked to over expand at times ;) )
If you would like my exact lessons and all of the printables, you can pick them up here.
This is AMAZING Stephanie, thank you for sharing with us.
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